This might become a regular thing here at Temporary? Insanity OR I might be so embarrasssed that I never share my work ever again.
In other words, be nice in your comments please or I will accuse you of KILLING my dream.
Ahem.
Random Scene That Popped Into Kim’s Head With Many Missing Bits That Will Be Filled in Later (there are no actual characters as yet – the sound was on but the picture was fuzzy):
Student: “I have an intrinsic understanding of the space time continuum you know.”
Teacher: “Is that so?”
Student: “Oh yes. It’s a gift really. My parents say that I’m a miracle child. And while I’ll admit they do sound slightly sarcastic when they say it, I often see dumbfounded expressions on their faces so I know that deep down they really mean it.”
Teacher: “Those expressions might just be shock at your lack of shame.”
Student: “Why should I be ashamed of my gift?”
Teacher: “I meant the way you use your so called gift as an excuse to try to get yourself out of trouble.”
Student: “Not so much an excuse as an explanation. And this did all start with you demanding that I explain myself. I fail to see the problem.”
Teacher: “The problem is that you’re two hours late for class.”
Student: “Like I said. Space time continuum.”
Teacher: “And that explains your tardiness how?”
Student: “As one of the few human beings with the ability to truly comprehend the effects of space time and the non-linear nature of time, how can you expect me to kowtow to mere minutes and hours? They mean nothing! Time is a spiral! A pool! A wave! A wibbly-wobbly line circling back and over and into itself!”
Teacher: “Wibbly wobbly?”
Student: “I’m dumbing it down for you.”
Question: Is the above only funny inside the confines of my own head? I have a slowly evolving idea for a novel for teens that involves being absurd, witty, and sometimes downright hilarious and I’m wondering if I can pull it off…If you think the answer is no just smile and pat me awkwardly on the head or something…
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18 Comments
I think it’s rather Calvin and Hobbesish and that, my friend, is a very good thing indeed.
I think it’s funny. I love geek humor.
I could see this book developing into something that teens and adults would enjoy!!
“I’m dumbing it down for you.” Fantastic!!!!
I think it is funny!!! :D Love how student says “I am dumbing it down”. :D
Yes, this is clever! I like it. Made me smile. :-)
I think it sounds great, made me really LOL :D
This makes me laugh. Picturing a small child having this conversation makes it even funnier. Have you ever seen a picture book by Scieszka and Smith called “Baloney (Henry P)”? Feels familiar in the best way.
Okay, that last line is priceless. =D I totally loved it. I think it’s a GREAT bit of scene and I think your dialogue is pretty organic.
I agree with the other commenters. That last line made me snort. I’d have to know more about the character to know if this scene is really working, but I’d say it smacks of potential.
Go for it!
Funny, witty, clever – the trifecta!
I’d say you have a great market for all the handkerchief-toting, tight dockers-wearing teenage boys out there. (And a few others, of course.)
I thought it was funny….I think the kid may be a fan of Doctor Who…
“people assume that time is a linear progression of cause to effect, but actually from a nonlinear, nonsubjective viewpoint, it’s more like a big ball of wibbly wobbly, timey wimey…stuff.” – The Doctor “Blink”
Funny! But I must admit that I get a completely blank look in my eyes whenever time travel or space-time continuums, etc are offered in a story. That DEFINITELY says more about me and my empty head than your good writing.
I think Fiction Friday would be a good idea! Go for it!
I could so see Sheldon (my favorite character in “The Big Bang Theory”) saying this as a student. Especially the last line!
I love it, the wibbly wobbly part the best. MMmm!
I truly hope you continue this, I love reading your writing. As for this little interaction, I absolutely love it! Rather hilarious, I must say. This could be an incredibly amusing book…you have a great character to explore there. Can’t wait to read more. (see what I did there…you have to write more to satiate my literary appetite ;) )
I’m loving it, too … even if I am a little late to the party. I suppose I am living dangerously on that wibbly wobbly time continuum line myself :) !! Where have the last 8 weeks gone?!